英語
私は高1です。 次の英文を高1らしく、少し簡単な言い方に添削して欲しいです。 塾の先生と考えたり、翻訳を使ったりして少し硬い言葉になっている気がしたので添削をお願いします。 Overview of my theme→ Today I am talking about Kariyushi wear. Kariyushi is a traditional okinawan clothing. It is known as the formal summer clothing of Okinawa. It was worn mainly by middle-aged and older men as business wear, but recently, women and young people are increase wearing it. Okinawa presents Kariyushi to the Prime Minister and others every year. My personal experiences related to the theme→ When I was junior high school student, I often saw people wearing it. For example, when parents come to school, gradation ceremony and other ceremonies. I thought it was so cool. Also, I saw Kariyushi on TV. The name of the program is "Haisai Shinkonsan". I was surprised that it could be worn at a wedding. interesting or attractive about the theme→ I think you can wear Kariyushi many situations such as in business and weddings. Moreover, Kariyushi are designed with Okinawan culture and nature, so I thought we could tell the charm of Okinawa with Kariyushi.
